--
light through the window,
fight sayin lets go
buckle up the headgear, helmet and all;
hear me through the radio
of war.
feet moving to the proving grounds,
fire a round-
or three
silence-
not a sound
CRACK
through the visor, head jerking higher;
recoil from a .2 round-
soldiers shouting
"GET DOWN"
shuffling on the ground amidst muffling shells
and baffling noises straight from hell.
"incoming!"
the radio blares;
moonlight glares on dead men's faces,
as team mates misplace ammunition cases.
screaming
cant find it!?
as we scramble like flies not quite ready to die,
i hope you lie
pinned under crossfire, the shells
thunder down; the heavens hailing bullets
at failing bodies
flailing
in the shrapnel storm.
and then she came, from the clouds through the rain
and morphine coated pain, 20 megatons
of red white and blue flying straight and true
into the heat of battle,
to beat the conquered and wipe my face clean (off),
so that it seems theres no one left
to report the theft
of lives at fault,
who lost it all
in war.
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Comments
One thing to note though, a .2 round......more common would be a .223 round found in an M16/AR-15. Maybe that's what you were referring to?
As for criticism, saying "f@ck" is more a cliched word; and since I do not want to get hassled later on that I wrote a racist comment, I'll just leave it at that. Nevertheless, great poem, and a nicely done job at flowing the ideas across your poem.
i made it point 2 because it read better, i put this under spoken word for a reason
but honestly speaking, i do not know which rounds people use in the armed forced
~Orion
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zerflin: [link]
mostly experimental here. "(d)lie" just shows an alternate spelling "die/lie"
and "f@ck" was experimental too, just to see reader reaction
much like "croxxfire"
glad you liked it
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